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Review of Red Rain by Aubrey Hansen

Government regulations said they had no choice. 17-year-old Philadelphia must stay on Earth in the care of complete strangers while her father is sent against his will to Mars. When a benevolent official allows her to accompany her father, Philadelphia knows she must keep her head down or be sent back to Earth. But when a search for her deceased brother’s Bible leads her into a hallway that isn’t supposed to exist, Philadelphia is faced with a question she doesn’t want to answer – the choice between returning to Earth or destroying it.

Within the first chapter I was impressed by the pace. During the second chapter I realized there was no way I was going to put it down soon, despite that fact the dishes were waiting. And had been waiting. I think I may have honestly told myself, “I’ll just start this new book late at night and then I’ll get to the dishes.”

Quit laughing.

I put it down half-way through only because I’m attempting to break a habit of staying up past 10 o’clock, and it was 11. I finished the rest the next morning, made a gushing note about it on GoodReads, then went to those dishes.

Pacing contributes heavily to an un-put-downable factor, but pace alone does not keep me stuck within a book’s pages. I must feel with the characters, be there inside their heads. Aubrey’s ability to make even minor characters feel rounded and real. I was fully invested in the main character and her goals and problems.

And the story! I feel like giving much beyond the blurb will be a spoiler, but I found it unique and interesting. While some twists I predicted, many more I did not.

Currently, Red Rain is only the third self-published work I think was worth the read. (I’m noticing a pattern of self-pubbed novellas being of better quality than self-published novels.) Niche genre, niche length, well-edited. I didn’t notice a single grammar or spelling error, when I normally catch a neat handful in the most well-edited self-published works. (Aubrey, I know you’re reading this. How’d you do that?) As a unique trait, every couple chapters there are very beautiful illustrations of a character.

4/5 Stars

Purchase on Amazon

On Writing World Weekly Round-Up: 3/18/12

I present to you my attempt at a weekly round up, that is, a conglomeration of good posts from the last week. This will be too long because I follow too many blogs. It will also be too much coolness to handle in its entirety, so just scroll through and open whatever catches your eye. :D If this isn’t too painful in the creation, you will get more.


  • News & Noteworthy

(As if every single one of these links isn’t noteworthy. My headings need work.)

The eye-popper of the week award goes to A Follow’s Not a Book Sale (Though It’s Really Nice), which asks “Does social media affect sales AT ALL?” via The Intern

Maggie Steifvater with lotsa From Rough to Final links! There is so much to learn from watching the pros edit.

I found Erin Morgenstern’s Flax Golden Tale wonderful this week. Read the flash fiction Monitoring System.

Alison Cherry runs a pretty entertaining blog as a rule, but you know The Things We Do For Research will be a real gem just from the title.

Luke Alistar offers sobering thoughts for writers on The Power You Hold.

Why Finish Books? Yes, this is every bit as odd-ball as it sounds. via The New York Review of Books

  • Advice

Ready to Submit? Think Again is a very comprehensive checklist to go through before, well, submitting. via Fantasy Faction

Pretend you don’t need 3 Ways to Keep Social Media from Taking Over Your Writing Time. Just pretend. I dare you. via Author, Jody Hedlund

8 Tips For Getting What You Want (out of industry professionals). via Go Teen Writers – not just for teens. ;)

Lessons from the Strictly Objective Critique Partner. via YA Highway

  • Writing Advice

We’ll start this off with a good old-fashioned “how to beat writers block.” Creativity Blocked? Here’s the Solution. Write a letter to yourself. Through the MAIL. No, really. via Write to Done

Here’s something with the provocative title of Writing Multiple Books in a Year– It Doesn’t Take as Much as You Think. via Mystery Writing is Murder

Done to Death: A New Trope questions how much original plots matter. via Speculative Faith

This is about changing the way you view subplots forever and Grey’s Anatomy. via Novel Rocket And to continue mining TV shows, Lessons from Downton Abbey.

The Art of Poisoning Your Characters, because we all know there is nothing a little poisoning couldn’t make worse, and worse is better, right? via Fantasy Faction

We were gifted with two brilliant pieces on Io9: How Not to Be a Clever Writer and 8 Unstoppable Stories for Writing Killer Short Stories.

EditTorrent talks about what three varied writers need to start. Once the push from what you need to start a novel wears off, Janice Hardy has So Where Were We? Finishing Manuscripts. She also has Under Development: Ways to Create Characters.

Want The Scoop On Agents? via The Kill Zone Authors

  • Resources

Nifty little things that have been around since the dawn of time I am only now discovering because I live underneath a rock. It’s dark here.

Solving the “I don’t have the money or the oomph to travel” excuse for not attending writer conventions is WriteCon, an online conference for KidLit, MG, and YA authors. It’s free.

102 Resources for Writing. Just in case you didn’t have enough links. This is one to bookmark, ladies and gentlemen. via Here to Create

Donna Macmeans has compiled a list of Rooting Interests, the things that get readers behind characters.

I present to you The Michael Hauges Story Concept Template. In fact, this is going to be the All-Important Reader Engagement Moment of the Week. Fill in the blanks with your novel and post it in the comments below so we can see what each other is writing! iva Jill Williamson

  • Fun

My twitter stream was filled by people tweeting their Hunger Names this week. It gives you your precinct, the number of your game, and the way you die, too. Yes, this is under “fun.”

“NASA has released videos shot from onboard the Space Shuttle’s Solid Rocket Boosters in the past, but you’ve never seen one prepared as masterfully as this.” via Io9

St. Paddy’s Day Writing Prompts – what it says on the tin. via Creative Writing Prompts for Writers

A fellow aspiring writer takes the amusing route in announcing a vacation. Which I should do instead of not posting for a month without notice.


Enjoy. Don’t forget to leave the your Michel Houghes Story Concept Template in the comments so we can learn about each other’s plots!

How to Make a Fantasy Character Name

[A note to my subscribers: this post was originally published in October, but wordpress hiccuped and the post was down within the day. Some of you will remember it and some of you will not. I just now made this re-post.]

Usually, fantasy and science fiction names come easily to me. But for some reason my current WIP does not want anything in it named. I was having a headache of a time, so I decided to do a little research. Maybe you aren’t having as bad a time as I was – you just need a fantasy character named, without the writer’s-naming-block. Well, you’re in luck. Fantasy name generators are a half-penny a dozen on the internet. Just google search, pull up a site, press “generate” until you find something you don’t hate, and presto, fantasy name. Go on. What are you standing around for?

Still here? Good. That means you understand enough to know no generator can possibly supply a quality name, specific and tailored and an enrichment to the rest of your fantasy world. You know a generator can not supply originality or the specific need of your story. Yay!

  • Quick: What NOT to Do

I found this humorous piece while researching. In short, it gives a good run-down of how not to make a fantasy name. Since humor does every so much better a job at explaining things (especially why things are wrong), I’ll just link. How Not to Make a Fantasy Name. It’s a quick read.

  • Methods of Creation

I found many authors sharing their method of playing with words and sounds in order to come up with something they liked. I suppose this is what I always did before; it just came naturally to throw together sounds. Lots of writers look through baby name sites and then manipulate a name they like. One author said she would take a word, and then change it one letter at a time until she had what she wanted. At first glance just playing with sounds doesn’t sound like a good method, but don’t dismiss it too soon. This mainly relies on your ability to decide on a name that “feels right.” Which comes to my next topic. . .

  • Connotations of Sounds

What makes a name “feel right”? It’s not psychic. It’s not random. Sounds have connotations around them. Yes, this is scientific. Think about softer sounds versus harder sounds. S and L versus the hard G and K, for example. When a word, especially a name, sounds like what it means, that’s perfect. So play with sounds. . . but know what you’re doing when you play with them. If you have the time – and I highly recommend you make quite a bit of time if you don’t have it – explore the site at, which deals extensively with this subject.

  • Fitting in the Language

Names are part of a language. Names from the same country are going to come from the same language. Grithinlot and Tien are different fundamentally because they do not sound like they come from the same language. Brandon Sanderson, an author of fantasy, detailed the way he came up with different languages in one of his novels, and I highly recommend the source – anything I say would probably be repeating him. Why do you need to think about an entire language when all you want are character names? Well, what else will you need to be naming? Cities? Animals? Foods? Maybe you need a magical phrase. All words are part of a language, and you can’t ignore that while worldbuilding.

As mentioned earlier, many writers have their own methods for giving their fantasy characters names. What is your method? What is one fantasy name you particularly like? What is your favorite fantasy name that you created?

Watch Me Rant (just a little) About Self-Publishing

I swore to myself I wouldn’t address hot, volcanic topics and spread their lava to my blog, but I am a reader as well as a writer, and as a reader I have something to say about self-publishing.

Namely: HELP! You’ve given me a bunch of low priced books without giving me a way to tell if they are a pile of bird poop or not!

This rant comes to you courtesy of a certain self-published book that has a great premise and base plot, but whose writer obviously never read anything about creative writing. Neither did the writer learn how to punctuate. I gave up on the book midway through the first chapter – and after several poorly written scenes – when I started seeing three typos glaring at me on every single page. I wasn’t even looking for them. (I thumbed through the rest of the book, and the writing quality didn’t go up.) Want to know what sort of reviews this book got? Six 5-star reviews on Amazon plus one 4-star, and two 5-star reviews on goodreads.  Not getting into the making-friends-and-family-to-review-your-book rant, not getting into the making-friends-and-family-review-your-books rant…

Did I mention one of the character’s names turned out to be misspelled on the back cover? I kid you not. Abbey instead of Abby. Hence rant.

Everyone talks about how great self-publishing is for a writer. They get control over their baby and a higher cut of the price too. Occasionally you’ll find someone shouting, “And the readers have to pay less, so they love it!” That’s great. It really is. Especially for someone who is as cheap about buying books as I am. But that’s not the end of the matter for readers.

I, as a reader, am scared to buy a self-published book. The problem is a quality guarantee. By no means does the traditional publishing industry absolutely guarantee quality either; however, it makes a guarantee of some sort. It guarantees an agent, an editor and various committees at a publishing house, people who see much more of the industry than most readers ever will, all thought it was good. In fact, the entire industry self-publishing advocates often bash is wired to create a quality bar. You know what else that industry does? They help make your book better.

Interestingly, the above system also supplies a guarantee to the the now self-publishing author who has been traditionally published before. The book they are self-publishing now may not have made it through the gauntlet, but the author has. The guarantee: the author knows what they’re doing. They know what professional level of quality is expected. My post is not addressing these traditional-turned-self-published authors.

Most self-publishing authors – those without a prior career in traditional publishing – don’t have that quality gauntlet. This doesn’t <em>automatically</em> mean the self-published book is poor, it just means the reader has no idea what to expect. And you must admit: a lot of self-published books are of inferior quality. That’s why I hesitate.

That traditional-publishing gauntlet – that at-times painful, slow gauntlet – ends up helping you create the best book y’all can. Not you can. Y’all. (I’m Texan, sorry.) The agent and editor are both there to help create a better book. Whatever you may think of their job, they want the same thing you do: a good book. Readers can tell the difference between someone who has done the best they can on their own and maybe with their friends help and someone who has done their best and had professionals guide them to do even better.

The rule of thumb in this business is you are never as good as you think you are. That applies to you, me, and my cat.

No, honestly, my cat is writing a novel. She’s been typing it a few characters at a time by walking across my keyboard whenever I have a word document open.

She’s not as good as she thinks she is.

Now, before you jump on me like a pack of starved wolves, I know not every self-pubbed book is bird poop. In fact, there’s a certain friend reading this post right now whose self-pubbed book is most certainly not bird poop. More of a golden egg, actually. I, too, see self-publishing having a glistening future. But be honest about the present. Self-publishing has opened the floodgates. Anyone and their cat – whether geniuses or overly-enthusiastic beginners – can sell their work. We readers don’t know if we’re getting scammed or not. This helps no one.

I don’t have answers – I wish I did. There would be more of a point to this post. But I’ve not seen the reader’s story of self-publishing told, and it needs to be told, often and everywhere.

The Year Has Two 2’s in It Instead of Two 1’s

The first day of 2012 is slipping away – about four more hours left in it for me – and I’ve yet to decide on my New Year’s resolutions. Hold that thought for now.

I’m not sure how many “resolutions” and “New Year’s” posts I read in the past week, but they were all silly or thought-provoking or otherwise cool. I always meant to contribute one. I just didn’t have anything silly or thought-provoking or otherwise cool to share. So I watched the Doctor Who Christmas special (finally!) and baked gingerbread cookies instead, saying I was giving myself time to think.

Have you ever tried to think and not mix up the salt and the cinnamon simultaneously?

Well, maybe I could think and not mix up the salt and cinnamon, but it was only my brain rehashing the coolness I had seen earlier.

Janice Hardy likes to put the chances of her succeeding after each of her (well-organized, I might add) resolutions.

Beth Revis isn’t revealing her resolutions – yet. As she conquers them she will announce her success on her blog.

Jeannie Campbell set up an amazing photograph.

Before we get back to me, click those links. They won’t take much time, I promise.

And Kathrine Roid? Kathrine Roid is floundering, trying to decide what to resolve. I know, many people decided days or weeks ago. This year I am was not one of those people. This year I had guests the past week; directly after a little over a week of Hanukkah. Wonderful guests.

Who am I kidding? I just didn’t set aside the time to make resolutions; that’s all the problem is. All I have to do it set aside time. *sets aside time* *steals*

First, the regular sort of resolutions, along with the chances of my success, because that was a cool idea of Janice’s. Also, deliberate steps to achieve these resolutions because I have been informed vague resolutions are always failed.

Goal: Start publishing science fiction and fantasy short stories regularly instead of letting them rot on your hard drive after you finish them.
Chances of success: 100% I am extremely motivated and have already looked into markets.
Steps to take: I love writing short stories, but I always tell myself I’m “supposed” to be focusing on my “more important” projects and that I should devote all spare time to my novel. Well, phooey on that. I write decent short fiction and I want to share it.

To start, I need an organizational system for those rotting short stories. I guess this resolution is another in disguise: organize my folders. Separate the pretty short stories that are ready for submission, the short stories that need polishing, the short stories that are WIPs, and the short stories that should be allowed to rot and be used as compost for future writing skill growth. Create a list of the science fiction and fantasy magazines I am interested in. There are lots of good ones out there, so this will mostly be clickwork. Set aside a couple hours every week to work on short stories. I want to give myself some leeway on this one, though, since I *am* trying to plow through a novel at the moment. Mini goal: start submitting a setting aside those hours by June.

(Oh, side note. If you are a fellow novelist who is either interested or completely not interested in writing short stories, Jami Gold has an excellent post on the benefits of a novelist taking to short stories.)

Goal: Work up to blogging three times a week again – you were doing this before and it was lots of fun, but now you’ve been neglecting your blog.
Chances of success: 50% I’d love to get back to doing this, but with me and my excuses I’m just as likely to fail as to succeed.
Steps to take: They key phrase is “work up to.” I keep at once a week for the first quarter of the year, always on a standard day so I get myself used to some sort of schedule. In the second quarter of the year, twice a week. The third, alternate between twice a week and three time a week. Starting in October I should be at my goal of three times a week. You should all tell me how happy you are to here this…

Goal: Use a notebook to jot down the little inspirational ideas and use them for a plot soup later instead of forgetting.
Chances of success: 30% The problem here is keeping at it.
Steps to take: I’m debating whether I should use an actual notepad and pen, or if I should go with Tumblr micro-blogging, just for fun. I already run to my Twitter if I ever get a <141-character thought, or at least keep a hold of that thought until I can run to twitter, so using Tumblr is entirely possible. Once I decide that, I plan to use the time I used to use journaling to jot down my muse tidbits.

(Another side note: I've had a neat journaling exercise going. Every day I take the time to write down in three sentences three things that happened. I can never right down something negative or unhappy. It takes five minutes a day too get you focusing on the proper things!)

Those were my three writing-resolutions. I have three family-resolutions too. Here's my pretty flowery banner to remember them by:

Next, the back-up plan. I read the most interesting post under the provoking headline “Resolved: Ban New Years Resolutions.” It is a very convincing argument that it easier and more productive to meditate on a single word all year long rather than create lists.

My theory for why New Years resolutions are so famously abandoned: we have no back-up plan. No safety net. When we fall, we tumble all the way down. Not me! *hangs net*


Now, the three secret-resolutions. Written on notecards like Beth’s, only multicolored notecards. ^_^ Why are they secret? Well, some people would call them dreams and point me toward a few handy-dandy articles on the difference of goals and dreams. I also freely admit they are impossible, and we all know how our resolutions are supposed to be feasible and attainable. Problem is…. I’ve just downloaded this wallpaper from Dieki Noordhoek.

“Impossible” is only an excuse.

So I’m putting these resolutions on notecards and flipping them over maybe only to get them out of my system… but we all know I hope I’ll be blogging about one of these sometime this year.

Blue, yellow, and pink notecards, if you were wondering. One color for each impossible resolution. *pets impossible resolutions*

Finally… nope, I’m afraid I can’t steal from Jeannie. I could never photograph something that cool. I just had to share what she did with everyone. But, as a treat to my fellow Whovians, you do get this:

The Doctor is right. Fairyland looks like the inside of my oven with gingerbread men all in a row.

Happy New Years,
P.S. If you aren’t a Whovian, try watching the 2011 Christmas special.

Book Review of The Scorpio Races by Maggie Stiefvater

The Scorpio Races is currently ON SALE ON AMAZON. Click picture.

I received an ARC copy of The Scorpio Races a couple weeks ago. I am ever so glad I got my hands on this book.

Some race to win. Others race to survive.

It happens at the start of every November: the Scorpio Races. Riders attempt to keep hold of their water horses long enough to make it to the finish line.

Some riders live.

Others die.

Sean Kendrick is the returning champion. He loves the sky and the island and his horse. Horses and racing are his job. Sean races to win.

Puck Connolly is different. She joins the races as a desperate move to keep her older brother on the island a little bit longer. Puck races to survive.

The premise grabbed me, and the story didn’t let go. This is a tale of courage and carnivorous water horses. The island of Thisby is a salty place like the sea. Here, and only here, do the bloodthirsty Capall Uisce come to shore. They’re the menace of the island, claiming lives both from sheep and loved ones, but if you capture one and train it you have a mount of liquid lightening. The November sea stirs a Capall Uisce’s blood more than any other month. In November they are the most dangerous, the fastest. So in November the Scorpio Races are held.

Sean and Puck live separate lives. Sean is quiet and serious. If he has any doubts he keeps them to himself. His one love and fear is Corr, his water horse – except Corr is owned by the island’s breeding tycoon and Sean’s employer.

Puck is a stubborn orphan managing with her two brothers, the older of whom is tired of the island. She joins the races in a wild attempt to keep him around long enough to change his mind. She is the first girl to join, and will use her regular island pony instead of the much more capable Capall Uisce, partly for principal – the Capall Uisce killed her parents, – and partly because money leaves her no other choice.

Do I need to explain how these two characters’ interaction is marvelous?

Sean and Puck meet each other with mutual admiration and wariness and forge and unlikely friendship. The stakes rise, and they both find the things they hold dearest depending on the race, but only one of them can win. Right up until the last few pages I was unsure of how Maggie Stiefvater could take her story to a satisfying conclusion, but she did.

The Scorpio Races is the only book I’ve read that I could call “slow and gripping.” The pace is slow, with only a few tense actions scenes scattered about until the climax. Even they seemed slow. But the story and scenes are gripping, literally; I have a tendency to shift my weight around and grip the sides of the book when I am excited. Part of this are the skillful POV switches between Puch and Sean.

Maggie Stiefvater’s eye-opening description and phrases also pulled me into the pages. Her craft is flawless, and a beautiful model as well as an exciting read. The one thing that could have made The Scorpio Races more perfect would have been the use of past tense instead of present. I’m one of those people who finds present tense distracting. But in all, The Scorpio Races earned itself a place on my favorites shelf. I’m going to step out on a limb perhaps shakier than my twitter branch and say I see The Scorpio Races enduring time and becoming a classic.

Recommended for ages 15 and up for mild gore/violence and language. 5/5 Stars

It is the first day of November, and so, today, someone will die.

October Poll: Your Least Favorite Genre

Well, your least favorite genre out of those listed. :) Yes, I intend for this to be a difficult decision.

September’s poll is closed! See the results.

For more polls, ongoing and closed, visit my polls page:

Tweet, Tweet

Click for Debbie Ridpath's useful "A Writer's Guide to Twitter." Image is her creation. (She's also a hilarious webcomic artist.)

I’m on a Twitter branch, wondering if the branch is going to collapse. But I’m on Twitter! For a while I’ve had small things – articles of mention, quotes, super-quick prompts – that just didn’t make a full blog post. Then I realized this is why people like me use Twitter. I am still flying after authors and agents and blogs I like trying to find their Twitter accounts, still have no Tweeting schedule, and still have yet to sort those pesky tags and categories on this blog, but you can follow me @KathrineRoid.

Testing a Character for Mary Sue-ism and What to Do About It

What is a Mary Sue?
There are several definitions of a Mary Sue. Usually a character that makes people say, “Mary Sue!” has some combination of the follow characterizations:

  • A Character Based Off Yourself

Named after you, working at the job you wish you had, possessing all your good qualities, dressing, thinking, and acting like you, this is the beginner’s Mary Sue. When I first started writing as a teen all my protagonists were copies – maybe idealized copies, but still copies – of me. Trust me, this is a bad idea. You will get too attached to your character, not allow them to grow and 3D-ize naturally, and will squish the story to fit the character, instead of the other way around.

  • A Perfect, Unbeatable, Fantastic Character

She is gorgeous. She will whip anyone in a fight. She can not lose. She gets all the guys she wants. If she’s got a fault it something like “a little clumsy when not on the battlefield.”  She’s a Mary Sue. These are the characters that annoy people. Unfortunately, these Sues also tend to masquerade as Really Cool characters. And it’s really temping to make your favorite character Really Cool.

  • A Character With Cliche Qualities, Backstory, or Plot Points

She was abandoned by her parents, has strange eyes that see into your soul, and will die in her lovers arms to be brought back to life at the Crucial Moment. If you’re wondering how you could possibly write a character this terrible. . . well, maybe not that terrible. But letting “little” cliche attributes pile up is easier than you think, especially if you are not well-versed in cliches.

Despite the female name, Mary Sues do not have to be girls. Guys can have the qualities too. Now, whether you call a male Mary Sue a Gary Stu or Murray Sue or Marty Stew is subject to some debate. For the sake of simplicity, however, I will only use “she” in this post. Substitute “he/she/it” in your mind.

A Little History

Originally, Mary Sues referred to original fanfiction characters. Even more originally, it referred to original Star Trek fanfiction characters. A short story mocking the abundance of young, perfect, attention-stealing insert characters coined the term. It is viewable here: The term “Mary Sue” has lost a lot of its meaning in fanfiction due to general overuse and definition fuzziness, but plain fiction writers have happily adopted the term.

How can I tell if one of my characters is a Mary Sue?

Well, the easy way is to try a Mary Sue test on the character. Now, in no way is a simple yes/no test perfect, but I’ve found such tests very useful. I’ve compiled links to the tests I’ve found most useful. They are intended for straight fiction characters (many tests you find will be intended for fanficiton characters).

  • The Original Mary Sue Test for Fiction Characters

[Note: the original original Mary Sue test which the above test was based off of was for fanfiction characters.]

  • The Exhaustive, Recommended Test [Slight language and references to sexuality. For a PG to PG-13 audience.]

[Note: on the same site is a Mary Sue test for created races.]

  • A Shorter Test

[Note: the "summary" after the test is humorously unreliable, but all the points are something to think about.]

The Mary Sue of Stargate: Atlantis

I just realized why Teyla is my least favorite character on my favorite show. She's an orphan, the leader of her people, a keen warrioress, partially Wraith, and the only new thing she struggles to understand is Earth culture. No wonder she annoys me.

Oh dear. How do I fix my Mary Sue?

Fixing Mary Sues isn’t too hard, as long as you’re not too attached. What exactly you need to do to fix your Mary Sue depends on what is wrong. But first, let me define “fixing.” I do not mean going, “OK, maybe I can cut that out,” and de-checking boxes on a Mary Sue test until you are down to a reasonable score. I mean taking a grand look at your character, picking up the worst problems one at a time, and figuring out what should be there instead.

  • Copy of You

So, she’s actually you, huh? Here’s a quick tip: change her (or his) name. I mentioned above that all my first protagonists were coppies of me. Well, one of those protagonists has since been rewritten (along with her accompanying story line) into someone else entirely who can carry a novel on her shoulders. The first step was to change her name. Then figure out how much of your storyline was pandering to the fact she’s you – and cut it.  Leave her alone for a few months. Come back and figure out who she really is.

  • Backstory

Backstory is perhaps the easiest to fix, and it’s even easier to fix if you’ve yet to start writing (this is why you test for Mary Sues in the development stage). Just. . . change their personal story. If you’ve already begun writing, you may need to add or delete scenes, but trust me, it’s for the better of your novel. This only gets tricky if you have a bad backstory giving a character their motive or something for integral to the story. In this case it’s back to the drawing board: your character is underdeveloped. Decide what is really causing Mary Sue to act.

  • Character Traits

Ditch the purple eyes and raven hair and the out-of-time-and-place clothing. Make sure she has a real character flaw – or three or five. Realize she is not going to stay calm and collected no matter what, and certainly not when everyone else is panicking. Take a look at your character arc: how has she changed by The End? Or did you make her perfect at the beginning and leave no room for development?

  • Cliche Development

If you just realized that Mary Sue easily switches from being an apothecary to leading the rebel army, if Mary Sue never gets honestly beaten or makes a mistake (without a reasonable excuse), if Mary Sue develops amnesia, and becomes royalty. . . hopefully you’re only outlining. :) Take bad plot points out and figure out a better way to get from the A before the point and the B after the point. Add good plot points (your character receiving the consequences for being a smart alec, for example). Think carefully about realism, since many Mary Sue plot point borderline the fantastic.

If you find that a character is just too deep a Mary Sue to keep alive and just can’t make it in your story, that’s OK. Sometimes its easier to start over from the beginning rather than try to revise the unrevisable. Just last year I scrapped a complete draft and started over from the beginning. It was that bad.

Things To Remember So You Don’t Huff And Ignore Everything I Just Said:
~Those tests are for symptom of the disease. Not every point is to be avoided like a hurricane; Mary Sue characteristics – when used with restraint – can be done well. See below.
~Yes, it is possible for you to see Mary Sue qualities in a character from your favorite or a classic book. If you are a really, really good writer, you can pull off a great story with a Mary Sue. And I mean J. K. Rowling good (try doing a Mary Sue test for Harry Potter).
~Every writer has made a Mary Sue in their day. You will too at some point. You are not J. K. Rowling. If you think you are, there’s a name for that psychiatric condition.

This is the first post in a serious on characters. You see, in my planning for NaNoWriMo, I’m fleshing out my main and supporting characters. So it’s all in self-interest.  May you never write another Mary Sue again! (I wish the same for myself.)

100 Themes Challenge Writing Prompts

A list of prompts has been floating around on the internet – I was told it originated on DeviantART – and after having successfully used the prompts, I share them with you.  You pick a list (I have two right here) and write something for each theme.  Poems, drabbles, short stories, journal entries, anything. A group of us from Holy Worlds are using the list to outline an entire novel to be written for NaNoWriMo. I just finished my outline today. :D You would be shocked to find how easy it is to create an entire, round, detailed plot just by using each theme to create a scene.


The Original List
1. Introduction
2. Complicated
3. Making History
4. Rivalry
5. Unbreakable
6. Obsession
7. Eternity
8. Gateway
9. Death
10. Opportunities
11. 33%
12. Dead Wrong
13. Running Away
14. Judgment
15. Seeking Solace
16. Excuses
17. Vengeance
18. Love
19. Tears
20. My Inspiration
21. Never Again
22. Online
23. Failure
24. Rebirth
25. Breaking Away
26. Forever and a day
27. Lost and Found
28. Light
29. Dark
30. Faith
31. Colors
32. Exploration
33. Seeing Red
34. Shades of Grey
35. Forgotten
36. Dreamer
37. Mist
38. Burning
39. Out of Time
40. Knowing How
41. Fork in the road
42. Start
43. Nature’s Fury
44. At Peace
45. Heart Song
46. Reflection
47. Perfection
48. Everyday Magic
49. Umbrella
50. Party
51. Troubling Thoughts
52. Stirring of the Wind
53. Future
54. Health and Healing
55. Separation
56. Everything For You
57. Slow Down
58. Heartfelt Apology
59. Challenged
60. Exhaustion
61. Accuracy
62. Irregular Orbit
63. Cold Embrace
64. Frost
65. A Moment in Time
66. Dangerous Territory
67. Boundaries
68. Unsettling Revelations
69. Shattered
70. Bitter Silence
71. The True You
72. Pretense
73. Patience
74. Midnight
75. Shadows
76. Summer Haze
77. Memories
78. Change in the Weather
79. Illogical
80. Only Human
81. A Place to Belong
82. Advantage
83. Breakfast
84. Echoes
85. Falling
86. Picking up the Pieces
87. Gunshot
88. Possession
89. Twilight
90. Nowhere and Nothing
91. Answers
92. Innocence
93. Simplicity
94. Reality
95. Acceptance
96. Lesson
97. Enthusiasm
98. Game
99. Friendship
100. Endings


Find your key emotion; this may be all you need to know to find your short story. ~ F. Scott Fitzgerald

The Emotions List
1. Birth
2. Enthusiasm
3. Love
4. Hate
5. Triumph
6. Feel
7. Wrecked
8. Soft
9. Cold
10. Without
11. Inspiration
12. You
13. Confused
14. Affection
15. Joy
16. Horror
17. Acceptance
18. Sympathy
19. Holding
20. Defeated
21. Pride
22. Knife
23. Overwhelmed
24. Depressed
25. Adoration
26. Worship
27. Zeal
28. Light
29. Exhaustion
30. Obsession
31. Rage
32. Empty
33. Anger
34. Fury
35. Delight
36. Submission
37. Infatuation
38. Anticipation
39. Pessimistic
40. Jolly
41. Grasping
42. Agitation
43. Calm
44. Astonished
45. Loneliness
46. Lust
47. Longing
48. Tender
49. Hard
50. Rebirth
51. Amused
52. Broken
53. Abused
54. Tranquil
55. Composed
56. Glad
57. Stress
58. Serenity
59. Colorful
60. Coping
61. Boisterous
62. Placid
63. Tired
64. Bliss
65. Neglect
66. Fine
67. Question
68. Energetic
69. Noble
70. Disgust
71. Lively
72. Power
73. Pity
74. Humiliation
75. Satisfied
76. Thankful
77. Hyper
78. Goosebumps
79. Worthless
80. Remorse
81. Degraded
82. Revenge
83. Fulfilled
84. Shame
85. Graceful
86. Shining
87. Content
88. Feelings
89. Pleased
90. Relief
91. I
92. Zest
93. Tears
94. Building
95. Optimistic
96. Thrilled
97. Dealing
98. Reflect
99. Embarrassment
100. Death


Do you take the challenge?

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